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Cut (deep)

I sit alone my mind my only friend
You cut me deep, a wound that will not mend
I still feel the pain you left behind
Your emotionless face still appears in my mind
Your scent still lingers in my hair
I tell you this, but you still don't care

Bleeding crimson sadness as the tears fall down my face
My heart was in it, but yours was out of place
I dream to get away from a nightmare you created
How was I to know our love was so dated?

Frozen inside I slide to the floor
There I sit bleeding forever more
Thinking of you in my empty shell
How did this happen? I didn't even know I had fell

Sitting here, I start to shudder
It's cold, but you made me colder
Why did it have to end like this?
Was I blind, is there something I missed?

My heart bleeds and pours itself into a open hand
The hand belongs to you, but all you do is just stand
That sad look in your eyes
Looks like your going to cry

Then I remember why I loved you
Then I remember why you loved me too
I remind myself that it's gone
The love, hate, tears, it's all been done

I stand up and look around, taking a knife from the kitchen rack
Holding it against my heart, I stumble back
I stab myslef with the anger you gave me

And this time the bloods for real.
©2004-2009 ~rainbowblossom
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Author's Comments

this is actually a re-writen poem of mine, and its really good, although depressing... :)

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:iconspengler:
that's amazingly powerful. the imagery is exact and the language itself is wonderful. it's one of those stirs-bad-memories-but-you-love-it-anywa y pieces! +fav
:iconrainbowblossom:
wow! thank you so much! i never get that kinda reception!! thank youuuuuu :hug:
:iconspengler:
just speaking da truth sista :p
:iconblossomcrown:
wow, I think that might be your best poem (or at least one of them)! So well written with all the right language and imagery. The last bit scares me....but it's just for effect right?!:D

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:iconrainbowblossom:
whoa! another person said the same!! thanks julie!! :hug:
:icongrungegirl666:
Yep very powerful and deep...I like it tho, nice one!

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:sadangel: None Better, Nyphetamine :sadangel:
:iconrainbowblossom:
thankiesssss again!!!! :glomp:
:iconseguicamma:
thats... really good. nice work.

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so next time think before you act, and
dont get caught before youve planned your alibi

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